Hi Adi, you are well planned for your camp reflection and have many ideas and details here to include in your writing. This will make the writing interesting and informative for the reader, I can't wait to read the finished piece. My favourite part of camp was standing at the top of the Denniston Incline and imagining what it would have been like to travel down in one of the carriages.
Ki Ora Adi it is Oliver here. I really really like the work that you have been doing. The thing that I like the most is how you added a pitcher in of your work but maybe next time you should add more information in at the top so we know what you are doing.
Kia ora Adi, I like how you can remember stuff that you did on camp. I can hardly remember what I did at camp. It reminds me of my mum taking me to the beach with my brother. Next time you could write the rest of your paragraphs.
Hi Adi, you are well planned for your camp reflection and have many ideas and details here to include in your writing. This will make the writing interesting and informative for the reader, I can't wait to read the finished piece. My favourite part of camp was standing at the top of the Denniston Incline and imagining what it would have been like to travel down in one of the carriages.
ReplyDeleteKi Ora Adi it is Oliver here. I really really like the work that you have been doing. The thing that I like the most is how you added a pitcher in of your work but maybe next time you should add more information in at the top so we know what you are doing.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Adi, I like how you can remember stuff that you did on camp. I can hardly remember what I did at camp. It reminds me of my mum taking me to the beach with my brother. Next time you could write the rest of your paragraphs.
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